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Started by spencer, March 13, 2005, 06:26:02 pm

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spencer

Hey all,
I\'m really into making movies and whatnot, and since my comic isn\'t finished to show you guys, i wanna post some of my "art" in the form of a script.  It\'s kinda weird in the fact that it\'s about a talking cup of coffee, but isn\'t supposed to be totally surreal.  it\'s supposed to be silly with a little bit of funny dialogue (that\'s not in there yet, it\'s not supposed to be funny yet)

Here\'s what I have so far, and please give me criticism, i know i can count on you guys.

MAIN TITLES.

We see JOHNNY, an aspiring artist, sitting at a table at a generic coffee shop.  Close ups show that he is trying to write something, but to no avail.  He occasionally writes something down, thinks about it, and then scribbles it out.  An ICED COFFEE is sitting on the table next to his paper.  Exhausted, he rests his head on his paper, with a sense of failure.  A VOICE comes out of nowhere.

                              COFFEE
                  Hey Johnny, you giving up or something?

Johnny raises his head and looks around for a bit.  The place is devoid of any people.

                              JOHNNY
                  (confused) who said that?
                              COFFEE
Right here Johnny.  Your vanilla iced coffee.  With half and half.
            JOHNNY      
(panicked) Oh Jesus I'm schizophrenic.  I'm schizo-freaking-phrenic!
            COFFEE
If you were schizophrenic, I wouldn't be the iced coffee you just bought.  I'd come out of nowhere, and would probably be a government agent or your college roommate.  Besides, you can't pay for one of your visions.
            JOHNNY
That's crap!  I have to be schizo, you're a talking inanimate object!
            COFFEE
This is a lot more common than you think.
            JOHNNY
Oh yeah, my friends are always complaining about their steak trying to talk them out of eating them.  FOOD DOESN'T TALK.  I'm just crazy!
            COFFEE
No one says anything about it, because they think they're going crazy.  Most people just eat the thing talking to avoid conversation.  You would think people would be more social to food.  It's the least they can do, we do keep them living.

Johnny still finds this all hard to swallow.  The coffee is making valid points, but it's still a cup of coffee.

                              JOHNNY
Ok, if I'm not crazy, there has to be some explanation as to why you're talking.  Are you my subconscious or something?
            COFFEE
Naw, I'm pretty sure your subconscious comes in dreams, and I can assure you this is not a dream.
            JOHNNY
... Are you a guardian angel or something?  Like a messenger of God?
            COFFEE
Johnny, do I have wings?
            JOHNNY
No, but--
            COFFEE
Then why would you think I'm an angel?  I don't have wings, no flowing robes, no harp... I'm a cup of coffee, man.  If you're going to compare me to something, I guess you could call me somewhat of a muse.
            JOHNNY
Muse?
            COFFEE
That's right.  I saw you struggling with whatever the hell it is you're trying to write, and decided to throw you a bone.

There is a short pause.  Johnny just STARES at the coffee (wide shot)

JOHNNY
                  I have GOT to be crazy.
                              COFFEE
                  DAMN IT YOU'RE NOT CRAZY YOU PARANOID BASTARD!
                              JOHNNY
(Taken aback) Fine, you're a muse in the form of a vanilla iced coffee.
            COFFEE
-With half and half.
            JOHNNY
Whatever, you're here now.  (leans back in chair and puts hands up) Go ahead, muse me up!
            COFFEE
A tangible muse doesn't work like that.
            JOHNNY
I don't think there's such thing as a tangible muse, that's just a figure of speech.
            COFFEE
Damn I picked the wrong guy to talk to.
            JOHNNY
Oh, well I'm sorry I ordered a talking coffee, you think I wanted this to happen?  No!  I wanted a tasty beverage to help get the creative juices flowing!
            COFFEE
That's just what you got!
            JOHNNY
Wait... Can I drink you still, what are the ethics on that?
            COFFEE
I wouldn't.  Do you really wanna drink something you had a conversation with?
            JOHNNY
More like an argument.
            COFFEE
(Sighs) No, no you cannot drink me.
            JOHNNY
Well that was three dollars wasted.
            COFFEE
Damn it by the time I'm done with you you're going to want to put me on your mantle and pass me on to further generations of the Marshall clan.
            JOHNNY
Well all you've been doing now is arguing with me!
            COFFEE
Fine, guidance time.  We gotta go to Andy's house.
            JOHNNY
How do you know Andy?  And how do you know my last name?
            COFFEE
I'm somewhat omniscient.
            JOHNNY
I think you're either full omniscient or not...  There's no inbetween.
            COFFEE
How the hell would you know?  If I know Andy, and that you last name is Marshall, and that Susie Derkins dumped you on your birthday in the 8th grade right after you said in your mind "we're going to be together forever,"  but I don't know what happened to Andy on his seventeenth time seeing that "hobbit" movie in theaters, what makes me not somewhat omniscient.
            JOHNNY
... I have GOT to be crazy.
            COFFEE
Fine, you're crazy.  I'm sick of arguing.  Can we go to where I'm supposed to take you?

gkg

 :o

veddy interesting - and strange.  in a cool way.
Peace.

image = <i>"Blue Velvet"</i> (front of 2-sided piece) (c) georgia k griffin - all rights reserved

spencer

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veddy interesting - and strange.  in a cool way.

I figured it\'d be cliche to have a muse or something in the form of a person.  plus, it\'s easier to film that way.  I can\'t direct coffee, but people may try and act it differently.

Chris DiCicco

Roma Rats do this all the time, just add toothless Robbie on the brown fake leather couch, I used to work with someone who wrote words, Name escapes me, so I call him Bob, he would sit drink coffee I would paint in the back ally, he would have these books ready to fall apart a coldish coffee next to billions of papers. he was a great friend.

Back to toothless Robbie he stopped me asking for 2 dollars cause its his duaghters Birthday an she\'s two .

like this

" Hay Cwisht do you haff two dollas fer my doder shesh going ta be two " . Now I went to High School with this guy an I don\'t know what happened to him.

I turned him down

Roma\'s good place to be, go people watchin, Artists, folkers ( Music ) and food just gotta watch out for the Rotches and the homeless growl guy.

Thats it liked yer story, the coffee could be a person, On the TV they put people in Waffle\'s on the Sarengeti , being chased by a hungery little boy.

I think someone could be Coffee.

Chris
The Exosphere  2013

CMA

spencer, i really really like it!...


fancy asking me to do the score?



keep me updated to how it all goes, i would be intrested to see the film.

spencer

that would actually be really cool, Chris.  I want to try and make this movie as "legal" as possible so i can put it into film festivals and whatnot, and the only way I could put music in was with people i know.  I had one thanatopsis song in mind for a car scene just because it\'s an awesome song that would fit in with the film trick, but besides that, i got nothing.

So yeah, I\'ll definately talk to you about it, thanks man